tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post3231775266919513050..comments2023-10-15T03:17:27.336-07:00Comments on Breathings: I Didn’t Mean to Say That!Jessica L. Celayahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13725283349220405323noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-68473502349405097832012-05-26T22:15:45.770-07:002012-05-26T22:15:45.770-07:00Good advice.Good advice.Denisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09275456448997619944noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-61963289269859798292012-05-23T21:19:05.681-07:002012-05-23T21:19:05.681-07:00That's cute -- those scrambling fingernails tr...That's cute -- those scrambling fingernails trying to escape will stay in my mind this evening. <br /><br />I belong to a critique group and we help each other spot those funnies. Most often seen are phrases like "she dropped her eyes to the ground" or "his eyes darted around the room." One of my personal favorites: "he flung his arm out to stop her."Patricia Stolteyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17192369425956406122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-75106566931077082332012-05-23T00:51:18.570-07:002012-05-23T00:51:18.570-07:00Great post Jessica, and a well-caught mistake ther...Great post Jessica, and a well-caught mistake there with the fingernails. I recently read a book that had been PUBLISHED that was utterly riddled with that kind of mistake. Urrrrgh, it drove me nuts.Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-18467248471917919012012-05-22T16:35:16.859-07:002012-05-22T16:35:16.859-07:00Excellent advice. Reading aloud always help.
NasExcellent advice. Reading aloud always help.<br /><br />NasRomance Book Havenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01268150556737773533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-55085757386203735112012-05-22T03:48:03.793-07:002012-05-22T03:48:03.793-07:00Excellent, Jessica. Love the mental image you pain...Excellent, Jessica. Love the mental image you paint about the fingernails--so funny--and so true. Thanks!Pam Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430692684579547400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-9508737069373033782012-05-21T20:19:00.760-07:002012-05-21T20:19:00.760-07:00When it gets tedious, I switch to a random accent....When it gets tedious, I switch to a random accent. That makes it fun.Jessica L. Celayahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13725283349220405323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-87535040680596466672012-05-21T19:55:25.927-07:002012-05-21T19:55:25.927-07:00thank you for pointing this out...i appreciate tip...thank you for pointing this out...i appreciate tips and advice!!momto8https://www.blogger.com/profile/13964950285763339907noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-74997747042689768442012-05-21T17:09:00.483-07:002012-05-21T17:09:00.483-07:00Oh, you have to edit, too? Good grief. Why didn...Oh, you have to edit, too? Good grief. Why didn't someone tell me this before? :-)cleemckenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15456109243453726483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-84888911307957928952012-05-21T16:14:43.150-07:002012-05-21T16:14:43.150-07:00You used the word 'eyes' 350 times? I see...You used the word 'eyes' 350 times? I see.<br />Ooh, sorry.<br />What really helps is if I read the thing out loud. I don't have to really project, either. In fact, I often mumble my way through it. It's a tad tedious, but it helps weed out sometimes unfortunate word choices (which smart-alecks like me LOVE to catch), dangling participles, and just plain sucky verbiage (like this).Al Penwasserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14052950809151897315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-12857157018382448312012-05-21T11:25:34.444-07:002012-05-21T11:25:34.444-07:00Know what cured me of eyes, looking & overkill...Know what cured me of eyes, looking & overkill of eye movements? I read a piece by a crit partner that had so many looks and eye movements that I cringe every time I see mention of eyes in any form. lol Although some is necessary, it sure taught me to scale it back, way back.<br /><br />If you let a piece sit for a while then come back, it's amazing what you can see.M Paxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14096697282530998519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-62671987302918822882012-05-21T10:56:20.329-07:002012-05-21T10:56:20.329-07:00You're right. We have a firm grasp on the imag...You're right. We have a firm grasp on the image we're trying to project, so we're pre-programmed to see that image in our writing, as opposed to seeing what the words actually express. That's why it's such a good idea to let a manuscript stew in its own juices for a while before picking it back up to begin the editing process. Great post!Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-60505268732841200642012-05-21T10:12:05.516-07:002012-05-21T10:12:05.516-07:00Oh wow!! I do the same thing! this made me lol!!...Oh wow!! I do the same thing! this made me lol!!! Funny and relevant!! Thanks a bunch. :)Cheryl Klarichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12633250643087095689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-73955674709262297092012-05-21T08:11:07.646-07:002012-05-21T08:11:07.646-07:00Yep, eyes are a dangerous thing :)Yep, eyes are a dangerous thing :)Tonja Dreckerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07683717853264134466noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-88658117335553495252012-05-21T07:28:52.389-07:002012-05-21T07:28:52.389-07:00Great advice. Reading out loud was an huge eye ope...Great advice. Reading out loud was an huge eye opener for me. What seemed a perfect sentance in my mind became obviously clumsy when I read it out loud. I also will leave the MS alone for a few months, then go back to it with a fresh mind. If I read it too many times, my mind's eye sees what should be there and not what is actually on the page. FeatherF. Stonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16241888058278268890noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-59127303810577378202012-05-21T06:15:41.987-07:002012-05-21T06:15:41.987-07:00point well taken!point well taken!Lynn Proctorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16349867270815243053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-60209199808789494972012-05-21T04:51:33.404-07:002012-05-21T04:51:33.404-07:00Excellent advice loved the write.
Great for me to...Excellent advice loved the write.<br /><br />Great for me to be back.<br /><br />Yvonne.RHYTHM AND RHYMEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11386975261804630799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-17335108090357326632012-05-21T03:44:31.363-07:002012-05-21T03:44:31.363-07:00I'm lucky to have a wonderful critique partner...I'm lucky to have a wonderful critique partner who always points these things out for me. That's interesting that you used the word 'eyes' so many times. Good luck on editing.Tonjahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08652479946102909276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-52216542921872402502012-05-21T03:26:24.225-07:002012-05-21T03:26:24.225-07:00Oh yes. I've just been through the editing pro...Oh yes. I've just been through the editing process for publication and it's amazing what I didn't see in the m/s! I have problems with eyes "traveling" - i.e. "his eyes traveled from her shoes to her hair" LOL. My editor assured me that everyone has these little blips :-) We are obsessed with eyes, though. 300 times? Yikes....off to check my WIP (I remember I once eliminated all the spare "that" s and reduced word count by thousands.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09186491465911432817noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-83450095779356256892012-05-21T03:03:41.569-07:002012-05-21T03:03:41.569-07:00...great advice. Editing is a necessary evil that,......great advice. Editing is a necessary evil that, when completed, is often times capable of deciding a story's fate. <br /><br />ElElliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6837377641582245515.post-66922132390953021192012-05-21T02:55:10.358-07:002012-05-21T02:55:10.358-07:00Ha, excellent advice! I found many dodgy word choi...Ha, excellent advice! I found many dodgy word choices while I was editing!Kyra Lennonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13853462182450429660noreply@blogger.com